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Do you recall.....
When the biggest drama was taking turns
We all played together, no matter color
Getting high was swinging on the swingsets
Boys and girls had cooties, no aids
Little girls aspired to be princesses, not whores
The "Yummy-Power" was Fun Dip and Baby Bottle Pops
A clear liquid would be water, nothing else
We never even DREAMED of lying to our parents
At sleepovers you stayed in your own sleeping bag
Our "Bed-Buddies" were our stuffed animals
And the strongest thing we drank was unconcentrated juice.
What happened to all our innocence?
Where did all the simplicity go?
Why are we no longer ignorant?
How did we grow so cold?
When the biggest drama was taking turns
We all played together, no matter color
Getting high was swinging on the swingsets
Boys and girls had cooties, no aids
Little girls aspired to be princesses, not whores
The "Yummy-Power" was Fun Dip and Baby Bottle Pops
A clear liquid would be water, nothing else
We never even DREAMED of lying to our parents
At sleepovers you stayed in your own sleeping bag
Our "Bed-Buddies" were our stuffed animals
And the strongest thing we drank was unconcentrated juice.
What happened to all our innocence?
Where did all the simplicity go?
Why are we no longer ignorant?
How did we grow so cold?
My inspiration to write this....interesting piece... came to me when I was studying for finals. I was thinking about how simple things had been when I was child, and it made me a little sad and mad at how much my brain had been corrupted since then. So, as a punch back at the arrogant system that made me and others who we are today...sometimes not for the better...I wrote this 
My question is...do you think that I have a lack of imagery in this? I feel that it might be to...dull. What do you think?
Critique for Written Revolution ---> [link]
Enjoy!
My question is...do you think that I have a lack of imagery in this? I feel that it might be to...dull. What do you think?
Critique for Written Revolution ---> [link]
Enjoy!
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Its very straightforward and I think a lot of people can relate to it for that reason. But I think as you said, you may be lacking a little imagination. It would be nice to be brought back to a childhood that the reader can feel/smell/hear... And though that might take away from it being more 'relatable' to everyone cause it'll be specific to your experience it may help. 
Just my thought though.
I really like it though. Sometimes I find myself thinking this too. oh how we all have grown.
Just my thought though.I really like it though. Sometimes I find myself thinking this too. oh how we all have grown.